Do you sometimes feel tempted to include technical details when describing your work? It’s a common pitfall — especially for candidates from engineering or scientific backgrounds.

Here’s an example that illustrates the difference:

🔹 Before (too technical):
“In order to save the tooling cost and time, I did not ask for tooling amending of the washer, but asked the supplier to decrease the hardness of the washer by 10 degrees… passed the water leakage test… sent it by FedEx…”

🔹 After (clear and outcome-focused):
“I substituted a softer washer that satisfied the manager; the sample passed the leak test and was ready ahead of the trade show deadline.”

The revised version not only communicates more clearly but also does so in fewer words, which is especially helpful given the strict word limits of MBA essays.

💡 Admissions committees want to understand your decisions and impact, not decode technical specifications. Use simple, reader-friendly language that reflects your ability to communicate with a broader audience.

🎯 When in doubt, simplify. Clarity always wins.

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