This post examines the transformation of an INSEAD MBA application essay, demonstrating how a verbose 649-word personal statement was skillfully edited into a powerful 500-word submission that meets requirements. The comparison highlights effective storytelling techniques that preserve the applicant's compelling journey from poverty to educational achievement while addressing both strengths and weaknesses authentically. Explore real…

This post examines the transformation of a UCLA MBA application essay, showcasing how a lengthy 442-word draft was refined into a concise 249-word submission that meets requirements while maintaining impact. The before-and-after comparison highlights effective editing techniques that preserve the applicant's powerful story about creating an employee wellness initiative following a colleague's burnout-related accident.  …